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First time posting here, mainly because I've never done any web development at all.
So here's my first try:
Holy shit! I want more!
You certainly have a thing for descriptiveness. It's something I sorely lack when I write, and something I truly appreciate when I read.
Thanks for the awesome excerpt;...
I see. Might be that I'm Egyptain and my conversational skills are a bit rusty. I don't get to talk English much with anyone around here.
I'll consider this. Thank you.
10th October 2014
Thank you. I'm glad you like it and I hope you review it! :v:
By the way, the discussion moved to a different thread: http://facepunch.com/showthread.php?t=1427117
What about the dialogue then? Any comments on the subject?
Aurora's complaints in that department is entirely lost on me.
I'm glad you took pleasure reading it.
Thank you. This is actually my second attempt overall, my first was… different.
Basically, the book is about him being unstoppable until the end of chapter 3, where he becomes part-machine. Then...
Thank you so much. I really appreciate it.
So, I guess this counts as creative art? I wrote the novel and made the cover using GIMP.
This was written with the help of everyone in the Programming sub-forum, I'd like to thank every single...
I've always thought it was for work posted on DA, that thought stuck for some reason and I never checked. :suicide:
You just shat on my parade. I was like.. fuck yeah! I made something that looks nice!
I removed it.
So GeelUI is going commercial? What a shame.
Is it a quantum computer?
Thanks. I'm glad you like it.
The sequel is being planned. I'm not jumping in blind this time. I'm going to write a run-down version first then flesh it out with details.
As a side note, if...
First book is out. :dance:
Yeah, I understand that. It doesn't work that way with stories told from the first person perspective though. I can't just jump to another scene where another character is doing something else...
But how would zombies move in space?
Thanks. I thought people were losing interest in this. Here's chapter 5.
Again, any input is appreciated.
Here's chapter 4.
I'm thinking that the pacing is going too fast. Read it and tell me what you think.
Just a question: does the following make sense? No spoiler tags because it lacks any kind of plot.
I decided that he didn't need it.
Here's the first draft of chapter 3.
I suspect that it has some plot holes. Help me find and fix them please.
I like to think that good and bad things aren't points in the same spectrum though. They're more like separate properties.
No amount of good you could do would atone to murdering a baby, for...
He might need the experience though, nanobots make everything easy. When he gets there he'll have to work without them.
Well, I'm in deep shit trying to decide whether or not he goes to college, and my lack of knowledge on how that works in the US is killing my momentum.
Chapter 2: https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/27714141/Flashover/Flashover%20Ch%2002.pdf
If you have any criticism, please post your opinion.
I recommend reading the rest of this post after...
Just you wait guys, I have some trouble planned ahead.
I'll have to think hard on that one, mainly because he's extremely smart and he knows his limits.
Do you mean something like an idea that doesn't work, or him getting into trouble with people?
Because I have the latter planned, but I won't spoil it further.
Well, Triple Helix is the blatant Achilles heel in his plan. That much should be obvious. :v:
I'm still looking for input regarding the new content by the way, what did you guys think?
I know I...
It's that obvious? :tinfoil:
Here's the new and improved first chapter:
Warning: Mild philosophy and creationism involved.
Thank you. Folks here have helped me realise that. I'm rewriting it with more story, character interaction, and a lot of 'failed experiments' so that it's more eventful.
I'll work on character...
Sure, if I can think up something interesting to add.
Sometimes I wish I was a Japanese anime writer. They should offer courses that teach you that shit.
Well, I could use some opinions. Is this a better story format?
Note: The prologue contains possible spoilers that I'm undecided if I want to remove or not as of yet. Plot hints or no?
Oh, thanks. I get it now.
That was surprisingly good! I didn't read more than a page and half, sorry. I can't read and write at the same time. It influences my writing. :v:
Yeah, but I also want people to like what they're reading, to feel engaged. I did that with my first book and I hope I can do it with this one too.
Thanks. I'm glad you're...
Thanks for the advice guys, I really appreciate it.
I'll have to admit that Dvd's post put me off balance at first (more like enraged me to be honest), but then I reread it again and realised that...
Thanks for taking the time to read this, I do hope you found it any good.
I have to admit that some of what you're criticising is intentional.
I intentionally left the plot wide open at the end...
I see now. I found this, and it's helping me understand.
I'm editing the story to reflect this.
8th September 2014
Thanks for pointing that out.
I knew I was missing a lot of things, and posts like yours are exactly why I posted this here. :v:
Sadly, I'm mostly ignorant when it comes to cryptography. I...
Thank you. I read about De Beers and Asimov is one of my favourite writers.
I think more nanobots are in order.
"We can rebuild him. We have the technology. We can make him better than he...
Hopefully soon, I'm going slowly because I'm writing about places I barely know anything about, and that's why I have to do a lot of research.
I already changed it. :)
You'll have to wait and see. This is a story about growth, so you're not too far off.
The idea is to continuously transmit, don't measure. I might need to...
That's true. I still build the world, just incrementally. I take it you prefer a more direct approach?
Thank you. It certainly could be done, but in my case… Well, I'm bipolar and I try to...
Oh, trust me, this is not a problem. This is a-certain-type-of-cloud-or-sphere big. (hint hint)
I'll admit I hadn't paid due diligence to my research in that area. I don't know now, I could remove that part entirely without messing with the storyline too much, or change it so that he gets a...
I'm glad you like it! I'm currently pondering which way to go with: One or two monolithic novels or a series of smaller novelettes.
I tried doing that with my last novel (an entirely...